The 71-pound Siberian husky, who is called Dealer, jumped on the bed where the 11 day old baby boy of Laura Dvorak, 33 and Daniel Hocker, 48, of Independence, was in his car seat. Authorities said on Friday, that the dog bit the baby in head . After 40 minutes of resuscitation, the baby was pronounced dead. Dealer will be put down in about 10 days and the boys parents have been arrested until further notice.
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I also chose this article. You did a really good job summarizing it using only the most important facts. This was such a sad article. Definitely not something I ever thought would happen.
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• You don't need a comma before a "that"
• The "Authorities said on Friday" should have been part of the first sentence, not the second. It doesn't read well.
• Missing a possessive apostrophe on boy's
• There should be hyphens here because it's a modifier to "baby boy": 11-day-old